R. J. Hoffman

Ah i see. i think you should develope an adition to this. its a great leed. you could probly branch any number of differently themed stories off of this. very ...

Ah i see. i think you should develope an adition to this. its a great leed. you could probly branch any number of differently themed stories off of this. very ...

I apologise Ayra but i have never even heard of that series before... well any ways as far as the spacing goes, this stupid thing wont keep my original format ...

i dont do editing for on with my thoughts. i liked the description, but what would be really cool would be if you could kind of smooth it out so ...

Good poem right here. i like how it can have so many interpretations. a bit short though, do you intend it to be short?

Im not one of those people who go around editing for people. and i sometimes piss people off because i am so candid about what i think, no offense. okay ...

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Pretty good, i like how you forshadowed about the future slaughter. over all i think you only need to improve in a couple ways. You should give more clues as ...

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This is a very short but fulfilling poem. It can easily be translated into several meanings, whether social or emotional. Usually i am not a very big fan of poetry, ...

Well arnt you a little bundle of joy, lol. seriously i know what you mean. i think this poem is a fair reflection on how young people who are outcasts ...

hey um dude you kinda freak me out a bit. I know you have freedom of press if you are in the U. S. but seriously it is to close ...

Im sorry for being an A$$ but it does. What country? What kind of a ship? What prophecy? what are thier back grounds? what makes Falk into a pirate? What ...

I would say you have a great idea, but it needs alot of development. I sugest you make the character descriptions less like a list, and add more detail to ...

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